Sela Locke

I'm going to get right down to it: You're trying too hard. There's the rather more proper sound of eighteenth-century English, and then there's overdone purple prose. I'm sorry to ...

I did very, very much like it, but you've heard that a billion times, so here's my one nitpick: *Dumbledore stands there, wearing a bright, flashy pink robe* Dumbledore: Oh, ...

Thailijah - I apologize for my relentless advancing. Heaven knows Mr. Guitar Hero/Chinless Wonder will be jealous. ; ) Thank you, for your very generous compliment, Thaiest dear. =DDDDDD -SELA ...

I don't believe this! Stephenie Meyer writes really well! I know everyone is entitiled to their own opinion but don't condemn her for writing about what veryone wants to hear! ...

Although it pains me to say it, I rather disagree with Pippie. If 'twas just a story about this being his second daughter, and his first had died on the ...

As usual, you keep the reader interested, curious, and at the end of the chapter, all they want is to scroll up and find more of story, waiting to be ...

Overall, I think you really overdid the 'EXTREMELY GORGEOUS ANGELBOY' thing. I mean, the idea of angels being so much like humans (and this might just be me, Catholic and ...

Thanks to all you faithful followers of this fatefully fanatic tale! I know it mayn't look like I've taken all your advice, but right now, I'm rather more writing than ...

I found it hard on the eyes, if only because you kept switching from the speech and phrases of the eighteenth/nineteenth century to that of the present. Examples? “My pardons, ...

This edited version was better - but perhaps, don't rush the flash-back so much? I mean, it still seems like your stifling what could be a really exciting part of ...

That's funny, I thought I made it rather clear: I am, as you well know, Duke Warrington of Jharrim... His surname is Warrington, as he makes clear here, but his ...

To answer not only your story, but also your latest post, Night Mistress, re-writing isn't enough if you're not improving, and you can't improve unless you a) read lots of ...

Welcome back! Sorry it took me so long to get this bit on! It's rated PG-13 'cause... Prince Kharles is dumb. More or less. Just watch out. Another vase shattered, ...

I'm not really one to nitpick, so I won't try to here. It seems a lot of people are having this problem right now - on YWS, anyhow. They make ...

I've noticed the others've have got most of the nitpicks, and I don't like nitpicking anyhow, so... (;)) This idea was actually really intriguing. To have her stuck somewhere and ...